INT.HOTEL - DAY
A man walks into the hotel room and walks to reception.
JOHN:
Is my room ready? My name is John Chea.
RECEPTIONIST:
Yes sir.
Receptionist passes a key to John Chea and he takes the lift to the 5th floor. John Chea opens the door and walks in.
INT.HOTEL ROOM -DAY
John tests the lights and air conditioning.
JOHN:
At least the lights and air conditioning works.
John walks into the toilet and takes a shower. He then turns on his computer.
JOHN:
I wonder how Beatrice is doing. I shall send her an email.
John starts to type, Dearest Wife……
INT.CEMETERY - DAY
Chandran sobs and stands up.
CHANDRAN:
I will miss Jonny. He was a good man.
Just then her phone vibrated.
CHANDRAN:
Wait an email? Who is it from?
Chandran looks at her phone and collapses. The phone read ‘Dearest Wife, Just got checked in. Everything prepared for your arrival P.S. Sure is hot down here.’
Done by: Aloysius, Michael.
ReplyDeleteI like this script as it is very detailed. However "John" should be changed as the readers may get confused.
ReplyDeleteHe added a conversation with the reception, which is good
ReplyDeleteI like the name. Very creative
ReplyDeleteAdded the receptionist conversation , it was good and they describe the scene of the receptionist bringing the man up.
ReplyDeleteThe characters were diverse and it has good description
ReplyDeleteAdded the conversation with receptionist. Did not mention that the email was sent wrongly, but it was revealed later that the email was sent wrongly.
ReplyDeleteThere are details. And also, I like the widow's name. :D
ReplyDeleteThe specific actions of the man and the other characters are shown. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteIt is very detailed, especially the dialogues.
ReplyDeleteI like it because it is very descriptive
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ReplyDeleteVery detailed, I can picture what is happening
ReplyDeleteI like it because it is very detailed and descriptive.
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