Should add more things that you bought.
What do your mean by 'Package dipped to the ground?' Could have elaborated on how the defect happened.
You should add more about Emily's reaction.
You should add how this incident has inconvenienced Emily
Cracked? Which part of the vase was cracked?
Try to add in some suggestions.
Write in other possibilities.
Should add more things that you bought.
ReplyDeleteWhat do your mean by 'Package dipped to the ground?' Could have elaborated on how the defect happened.
ReplyDeleteYou should add more about Emily's reaction.
ReplyDeleteYou should add how this incident has inconvenienced Emily
ReplyDeleteCracked? Which part of the vase was cracked?
ReplyDeleteTry to add in some suggestions.
ReplyDeleteWrite in other possibilities.
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